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What are your thoughts about the writer's tone/ voice? Is he/ she aware of an intended audience? If you could conference with the writer, what advice would you give to improve the selection? [8 points, posted by 10.21.09]

My favorite selection is Song Of Myself by Adam Velazquez. I really liked this because it had a good rhythm to it. I felt although I connected with these lyrics: "I celebrate myself, and sing myself, And what I assume you shall assume, For every atom belonging to me as good belongs to you" I think he is aware of the audience he has and he relates well with them. I would tell him that he should add a little more about school because it would relate to everyone who is going to read it.